[FF7PC-98] Beacause - FF7 Retranslation (Merged into Reunion, use that instead)

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Checking in; bit late to the party and could be that I'm once again correcting things you've already caught.  But just in case:

{RED XIII}
“The Promised Land?
   That's just a legend?”
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President Shinra
“But an enthralling legend.
   So enticing that it must be persued.”{NEW}
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"That's just a legend" isn't a question; I'd say put either a period or an exclamation point there, or even an ellipsis depending on how you read Red's mood there.

And "pursued", not "persued".
 
No, a question mark after a sentence like that is fine, it means the person is saying it expecting a response (in person you'd have facial expressions and what not).  It is perfectly OK in script.  Without the question mark it would be said as if it was a fact.  Red is unsure if it is or isn't.  "Isn't that just a legend"  is the same thing, but people do not always talk perfectly.

Spelling mistake corrected, cheers :)
 
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Aye...  it is sad we can't get the pun in there.  When I started this project I was rather naive about the Japanese language and thought everything would work in some way, but that simply isn't it at all.  Some things have to be sacrificed.  The problem I have with the original and with FF6 (Woolsey) is that they take too many liberties and make too many mistakes.

Enhancing the material whilst sticking to accuracy as much as is possible is preferable to doing what the hell you want.
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Oh my gosh, right? One of the first things I learned when I began teaching myself the language (I know enough to watch some raw anime at this point) is foreign languages aren't just word swaps and things get lost even in the best cases. If a few puns are the greatest things lost in this retranslation, you are all pretty much gods. I finally get what you meant by this not being a direct translation of the Japanese - meaning is more important than what's actually there, and that's what all translations should be imo.
 
I think the new is quirkier.  8)

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Rude“…Leno sends his kind regards. He's hoping to meet you as soon as the injuries you gave him heal up.”{NEW}“Now you are best friends, he wants to share his  new weapon with you all.”

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Mythril Mine------------------------------Rude“Just a second!”------------------------------Rude“…”------------------------------Rude“Do you know who I am?”{CHOICE}The Turks, right?{CHOICE}Not interested------------------------------Rude“…I'm from the Turks. And don't you forget it.”------------------------------Rude“Well if you know,  then this won't take long.”------------------------------Rude“It's difficult to explain what the Turks do…”------------------------------{CLOUD}“Kidnapping, right?”------------------------------Rude“To put it negatively… you could say that.”------------------------------Rude“…But, that's not all there is to it anymore.”------------------------------Elena“It's all right, Rude! I know you don't like speeches, so don't force it!”------------------------------Rude“Then explain, Elena.”------------------------------Elena“I'm the newest member of the Turks, Elena. Thanks to what you did to Reno, we're short-handed.”------------------------------Elena“…But, because of that, I got promoted to the Turks…”------------------------------Elena“Anyhow, our job is to find out where Sephiroth is headed.”{NEW}“And to try and stop you every step of the way.”------------------------------Elena“Wait a minute, it's the other way around… You're the ones that are getting in our way.”------------------------------Tseng“…Elena. You talk too much.”------------------------------Elena“Sorry…Tseng.”------------------------------Tseng“I thought I gave your orders.”{NEW}“Now go. Don't forget to file your report.”------------------------------Rude“…Reno said he wanted to see you after the injuries you gave him healed.”{NEW}“He wants to show his affection for you all… with a new weapon.”------------------------------Tseng“Well, then…”------------------------------Tseng“Where's {AERIS}? Isn't she with you?”------------------------------Tseng“Oh… Then give her my regards.”------------------------------Tseng“{AERIS}… Long time no see.”------------------------------Tseng“Looks like you're safe from the Shinra for a while, now that Sephiroth reappeared.”------------------------------{AERIS}“What are you saying? That I should be grateful to Sephiroth?”------------------------------Tseng“No…”{NEW}“I won't be seeing much of you, so take care.”------------------------------Tseng“Well then, stay out of Shinra's way.”------------------------------{CLOUD}“{AERIS} isn't with us. She's with the others.”------------------------------{BARRET}“Wh, who are you!?”------------------------------{AERIS}“By any chance, are you…?”------------------------------{TIFA}“Who are you?”------------------------------{RED XIII}“… I hoped I'd never see you again…”------------------------------{CHOICE}“Sir!”{CHOICE}------------------------------Elena“Mr. Tseng!?”------------------------------Tseng“No need to tell them about our orders.”------------------------------Rude/Elena“Yes sir!”------------------------------{AERIS}“…Strange, hearing  that from you.”------------------------------Elena“Oh! Right!”------------------------------Tseng“…Elena. You don't seem to understand.”------------------------------Elena“Oh!{PAUSE 30} I'm, I'm sorry…”------------------------------Tseng“…Go. Don't let Sephiroth get away.”------------------------------Elena“Very well, Rude and I will go after Sephiroth, who's heading for {CYAN}Junon Harbor{WHITE}!”------------------------------
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Mithril Mine------------------------------Rude“Just a second!”------------------------------Rude“…”------------------------------Rude“Do you know who I am?”{CHOICE}The Turks,right?{CHOICE}I'm not interested------------------------------Rude“…I'm from the Turks. And don't you forget it.”------------------------------Rude“Well if you already know, then this won't take long…”------------------------------Rude“It's difficult to explain what the Turks do…”------------------------------{CLOUD}“Abducting people?”------------------------------Rude“To put it negatively… you could say that.”------------------------------Rude“…But there's more to it these days.”------------------------------Yrena“Rude! I know you don't like speeches, so don't force it!”------------------------------Rude“…I'll leave this to you then,Yrena.”------------------------------Yrena“I'm the newest member of the Turks,Yrena. Thanks to what you did to Leno, we're short-handed.”------------------------------Yrena“…Although,because of that, I was accepted into the Turks…”------------------------------Yrena“At any rate, our orders are to determine where Sephiroth is headed.”{NEW}“And to make your life difficult every step of the way.”------------------------------Yrena“Hang on, it's the other way around… You're the ones getting in our way.”------------------------------Zeng“…Yrena. You've said more than enough.”------------------------------Yrena“Sorry… Mr.Zeng.”------------------------------Zeng“I thought I gave you your orders.”{NEW}“Go. Do not fail to report back as instructed.”------------------------------Rude“…Leno sends his kind regards. He's hoping to meet you as soon as the injuries you gave him heal up.”{NEW}“Now you're best friends, he wants to share his  new weapon with you all.”------------------------------Zeng“Well then…”------------------------------Zeng“…{AERIS}? Isn't she with you?”------------------------------Zeng“I see… Then give her my best wishes.”------------------------------Zeng“{AERIS}… It's been a while.”------------------------------Zeng“Now that Sephiroth's reappeared, as far as Shin-Ra's concerned, you're no longer a priority.”------------------------------{AERIS}“What are you saying? That I should be grateful to Sephiroth?”------------------------------Zeng“No…”{NEW}“But we'll be seeing less of each other, so take care.”------------------------------Zeng“Well then,gentlemen. I would very much appreciate it if you'd stay out of Shin-Ra's way.”------------------------------{CLOUD}“{AERIS} isn't here. She's with the others.”------------------------------{BARRET}“Wh-who the hell're you!?”------------------------------{AERIS}“By any chance,are you…?”------------------------------{TIFA}“Who are you?”------------------------------{RED XIII}“… Now that's a face I didn't care to see.”------------------------------{CHOICE}“Sir!”{CHOICE}------------------------------Yrena“Mr. Zeng!?”------------------------------Zeng“They don't need to know our orders.”------------------------------Rude/Yrena“Yes sir!”------------------------------{AERIS}“…Strange,hearing  that from you.”------------------------------Yrena“Ah! That's right!”------------------------------Zeng“…Yrena. Can you understand the words that are leaving my lips?”------------------------------Yrena“Ah!{PAUSE 30} I'm,I'm sorry…”------------------------------Zeng“…Go. Don't let Sephiroth get away.”------------------------------Yrena“Very well, Rude and I will go after Sephiroth, who's heading for {CYAN}Junon Harbour{WHITE}!”------------------------------
 
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Inn: 2f------------------------------{CLOUD}'s Past------------------------------{PAUSE 30}Received "Megalixir"!------------------------------Empty…------------------------------Can't reach it…------------------------------{CLOUD}“Damn!!”------------------------------{TIFA}“Oh! You!!”------------------------------{CID}“…Don't mess with me!!”------------------------------{AERIS}“{CLOUD}, you're late!”------------------------------{BARRET}“Yo man, you're late!”------------------------------{CLOUD}“Sorry to keep you waiting.”------------------------------{AERIS}“Guess everyone's here now.”------------------------------{BARRET}“So let's hear your story…”{NEW}“You know, the one about Sephiroth and the crisis of the Planet.”{NEW}“Let's hear it all.”------------------------------{CLOUD}“…I used to want to be like Sephiroth, so I joined SOLDIER.”{NEW}“After working with Sephiroth on several missions, we became friends.”------------------------------{BARRET}“You call that a friend?”------------------------------{CLOUD}“Yeah, well…”{NEW}“He was older than me, and hardly ever talked about himself.”------------------------------{CLOUD}“So I guess you'd call us war buddies… We trusted each other. Until one day…”------------------------------{TIFA}“…”------------------------------{AERIS}“…One day?”------------------------------{CLOUD}“After the war it was SOLDIER's duty to put down any resistance against the Shinra.”------------------------------{CLOUD}“…That was five years ago.”{NEW}“I was 16…”------------------------------{CLOUD}“Sephiroth's strength is incredible. He is far stronger in reality than any stories you  may have heard about him.”------------------------------{AERIS}“So… Where do you come in?”------------------------------{CLOUD}“Me? I was mesmerized by the way Sephiroth fought.”------------------------------{CLOUD}“…And then we reached Nibelheim.”------------------------------{BARRET}“I remember Jenova. That's that damn headless spook livin' in the Shinra building.”------------------------------{CLOUD}“That's right.”------------------------------{TIFA}“{BARRET}, would you please let us hear what {CLOUD} has to say? You can ask questions later.”------------------------------{BARRET}“{TIFA}, I was only…”------------------------------{TIFA}“OK {CLOUD}, continue.”------------------------------{AERIS}“The childhood friends reunite!”------------------------------{CLOUD}“…I was really surprised with {TIFA}.”------------------------------{BARRET}“Damn, Shinra! The more I hear, the more I hate 'em!”------------------------------{TIFA}“…Who would have ever thought the Mako Reactor held such a secret.”------------------------------{AERIS}“{TIFA}… Were you waiting outside then?”------------------------------{TIFA}“…Yes.”------------------------------{CLOUD}“We returned to Nibelheim. Sephiroth confined himself to the Inn. He didn't even try to talk to me.”------------------------------{TIFA}“Then all of a sudden he just disappeared, right?”------------------------------{CLOUD}“We found him inside the biggest building in Nibelheim.”------------------------------{TIFA}“The villagers used to call it the Shinra mansion.”------------------------------{CLOUD}“Long ago, people from Shinra used to live in that mansion…”------------------------------{CLOUD}“…and that's the end of my story.”------------------------------{BARRET}“Wait a damn minute! That's it? No more?”------------------------------{CLOUD}“…I don't remember.”------------------------------{AERIS}“What happened to Sephiroth?”------------------------------{CLOUD}“In terms of skill, I couldn't have killed him.”------------------------------{TIFA}“Official records state Sephiroth is dead. I read it in the newspaper.”------------------------------{AERIS}“Shinra, Inc. owns the newspapers, so you can't rely on that.”------------------------------{CLOUD}“…I want to know the truth. I want to know what happened.”{NEW}“I challenged Sephiroth and lived. Why didn't he kill me?”------------------------------{TIFA}“…I'm alive, too.”------------------------------{AERIS}“A lot of this doesn't make sense. What about Jenova? It was in the Shinra building, right?”------------------------------{CLOUD}“Shinra shipped it from Nibelheim to Midgar.”------------------------------{AERIS}“Did someone carry it out later? It was missing from the Shinra building.”------------------------------{TIFA}“Sephiroth?”------------------------------{BARRET}“Damn! None of this makes sense!”{NEW}“I'm going, going, going, gone!”{NEW}“And I'm leavin' the thinkin' to you!”------------------------------{BARRET}“Yo, {CLOUD}! Let's get a move on!”{CHOICE}Wait a sec{CHOICE}Right------------------------------{BARRET}“{CLOUD}, what's wrong? You just gonna stand there while Sephiroth heads for the Promised Land?”{NEW}“I ain't lettin' Sephiroth or Shinra get to no Promised Land. If they do, then we're all screwed.”{NEW}“Y'know what I'm sayin'?”{CHOICE}Beautiful, just beautiful!{CHOICE}Is that all?------------------------------{BARRET}“Jus' leave it to me!”------------------------------{BARRET}“Fine! That's good enough.”------------------------------{BARRET}“Yo, c'mon let's go!”------------------------------{CLOUD}“Oh brother…”------------------------------{TIFA}“{CLOUD}?”------------------------------{TIFA}“How bad was I after Sephiroth stabbed me?”------------------------------{CLOUD}“I thought you were a goner. …I was so sad.”------------------------------{AERIS}“I…”------------------------------{AERIS}“The Ancients…Cetra…Jenova… Sephiroth and myself…”------------------------------{TIFA}“Let's go. {BARRET}'s waiting.”------------------------------{RED XIII}“What a fascinating story…”------------------------------{BARRET}“Yeah, maybe so. Wanna take a breather here?”------------------------------{BARRET}“Hmph! Pokin' his damn nose in where it don't belong. {CLOUD}! Why don't you finish that story?”------------------------------{RED XIII}“(Phew……)”------------------------------{BARRET}“(Why you talkin' to me!?)”{CHOICE}Save game and rest{CHOICE}Keep talking------------------------------{BARRET}“…I get it.”------------------------------{RED XIII}“That would seem to explain the increase  in the number of monsters recently.”{NEW}“I think we should listen carefully to {CLOUD}. Don't you think so {BARRET}?”------------------------------
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Inn,2F------------------------------{CLOUD}'s Past------------------------------…{PAUSE 30}Obtained "Last Elixir"!------------------------------Empty…------------------------------Can't reach it…------------------------------{CLOUD}“…Oh,come on!!”------------------------------{TIFA}“Oh! You!!”------------------------------{CID}“…Don't mess with me!!”------------------------------{AERIS}“{CLOUD},you're late!”------------------------------{BARRET}“Yo,thanks for bein' on time!”------------------------------{CLOUD}“Sorry. Looks like I kept you all waiting.”------------------------------{AERIS}“That's everyone.”------------------------------{BARRET}“So… your story?”{NEW}“Sephiroth…  a crisis for the planet. Let's hear it all.”------------------------------{CLOUD}“…I wanted to be like Sephiroth, so I became a Soldier.”{NEW}“After working with Sephiroth on several missions, we became close friends.”------------------------------{BARRET}“He was your friend?”------------------------------{CLOUD}“Well…”{NEW}“He was older than me, and hardly ever talked about himself.”------------------------------{CLOUD}“We were comrades… I guess. We trusted each other. Up until then…”------------------------------{TIFA}“…”------------------------------{AERIS}“…Until then?”------------------------------#h 4{CLOUD}“Soldier's duty after the war was mostly concerned with rebels who were opposed to Shin-Ra… A lot of that work was pretty grim.”------------------------------{CLOUD}“…It was five years ago.”{NEW}“I was sixteen…”------------------------------{CLOUD}“Sephiroth's strength is unreal. He is far stronger in reality than any of the stories you hear about him.”------------------------------{AERIS}“Hm? So where do you come in?”------------------------------{CLOUD}“Me? I was mesmerised by the way Sephiroth fought.”------------------------------{CLOUD}“…And then we reached Niblheim.”------------------------------{BARRET}“Jenova… I remember! That damn headless freak in the Shin-Ra Building!”------------------------------{CLOUD}“That's right.”------------------------------{TIFA}“Hold on,{BARRET}.  Let's hear {CLOUD}'s story first. You can ask questions later.”------------------------------{BARRET}“C'mon,{TIFA}…”------------------------------{TIFA}“Okay {CLOUD},carry on.”------------------------------{AERIS}“The childhood friends reunite!”------------------------------{CLOUD}“…{TIFA} really surprised me.”------------------------------{BARRET}“Argh! Shin-Ra! Again! The more I hear, the more I hate 'em!”------------------------------{TIFA}“…Who would have thought that a Mako reactor could hold such a secret…?”------------------------------{AERIS}“Hmm,{TIFA}… Did you wait outside the whole time?”------------------------------{TIFA}“…Yes.”------------------------------{CLOUD}“We returned to Niblheim. Sephiroth confined himself to the Inn. He didn't talk with anyone.”------------------------------{TIFA}“And then he just disappeared.”------------------------------{CLOUD}“We found him inside the biggest building in Niblheim.”------------------------------{TIFA}“The villagers called it the Shin-Ra Mansion.”{NEW}“It was unoccupied from before we were born…”------------------------------{CLOUD}“Long ago,people from Shin-Ra did used to live in that mansion…”------------------------------{CLOUD}“…and that's the end of my story.”------------------------------{BARRET}“Wait a damn minute! What happened next?”------------------------------{CLOUD}“…I don't remember.”------------------------------{AERIS}“What happened to Sephiroth?”------------------------------{CLOUD}“With the kind of power he has, I hadn't a prayer of defeating him.”------------------------------{TIFA}“Sephiroth has been declared dead in the public records. I read it in the newspaper.”------------------------------{AERIS}“The Shin-Ra Company prints the newspapers, so you can't rely on them.”------------------------------{CLOUD}“…I need to be sure… about what happened back then.”{NEW}“I went up against Sephiroth and survived. Why didn't he kill me?”------------------------------{TIFA}“…I'm alive,too.”------------------------------{AERIS}“A lot of this doesn't fit. What about Jenova? It was in the Shin-Ra Building,right?”------------------------------{CLOUD}“Shin-Ra shipped it from Niblheim to Midgar.”------------------------------{AERIS}“Did someone come and take it? It's not in the Shin-Ra building anymore.”------------------------------{TIFA}“Sephiroth…?------------------------------{BARRET}“Aaaaargh! I don't get any of this!”{NEW}“I'm going, going, gone!!”{NEW} “And I'm leavin' the thinkin' to you guys!”------------------------------{BARRET}“Yo,{CLOUD}! Get things sorted for when we leave!”{CHOICE}Wait a sec{CHOICE}Got it------------------------------{BARRET}“{CLOUD},what're you waitin' for? You just gonna stand there while Sephiroth heads for the Promised Land?”{NEW}“I ain't lettin' Sephiroth or Shin-Ra get there. If they do,we're all screwed.”{NEW}“That's what I do know!”{CHOICE}Beautiful!{CHOICE}Is that all?------------------------------{BARRET}“Jus' leave it to me!”------------------------------{BARRET}“Oh,c'mon! You don't need no more!”------------------------------{BARRET}“Let's go!”------------------------------{CLOUD}“Man…”------------------------------{TIFA}“…{CLOUD}?”------------------------------{TIFA}“How bad was I after Sephiroth slashed me?”------------------------------{CLOUD}“I thought you were a goner. …It was awful.”------------------------------{AERIS}“I…”------------------------------{AERIS}“The Ancients… the Cetra… Jenova… Sephiroth… and me…”------------------------------{TIFA}“Let's go. {BARRET}'s waiting.”------------------------------{RED XIII}“What a fascinating story…”------------------------------{BARRET}“Y-yeah,I guess so. Wanna take a breather here?”------------------------------{BARRET}“Hmph,keep your nose out of it. Oi,{CLOUD}… Carry on with the story.”------------------------------{RED XIII}“(Hmph……)”------------------------------{BARRET}“(Wh-what you askin' me for!?)”{CHOICE}Save the game and take a break{CHOICE}Keep talking------------------------------{BARRET}“…Okay.”------------------------------{RED XIII}“Is that the reason for the increase in monsters over the past few years?”{NEW}“I think we should listen to {CLOUD}'s story more carefully from here on. Isn't that so,{BARRET}?”------------------------------
 
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I just wanted to say keep up the good work as this is a project I have been eagerly awaiting for some time now. As awesome as the menu overhaul project is, which it is, I was sad that this project was put on the back burner.

I enjoy reading your translation snippets but this phrase especially caught my attention. I know that grammatical errors are going to be fixed and such, so I don't bother with pointing those out if there are any, and I don't know Japanese so I can't speak for any accuracy.

But...

"With the kind of power he has, I hadn't a prayer of defeating him.”

...sounds slightly unnatural. I just can't help but picture a southern American twang when reading that. Is there anyway it could be like, "With the kind of power he has, I didn't stand a chance of defeating him." or "With the kind of power he has, I hadn't a chance of defeating him." or are they too unfaithful to the original?

Any of the three is fine I guess, maybe I just need to hear someone say that nonchalantly.

Edit: Upon reading my suggestions it looks like I am against the word prayer being used, which I'm not so I guess I should give another example: "With the kind of power he has, I didn't have a prayer of defeating him."

Also, "With the kind of power he has, I didn't have a chance of defeating him." still sounds better. I just don't really like the hadn't/prayer combo.
 
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I agree...  'didn't' probably works better (I have changed it), in fact I spent quite a long time with that sentence.  I suppose it also depends on taste.  SOmeone else out there will no doubt say hadn't is best and another that prayer "isn't cloud" or something haha

Also, this project has never been secondary... it has always been priority but I am at the mercy of my translator's time as well.  If he is busy, I cannot work.  Unfortunately most Japanese speakers like to whinge that the original sounds crap and then when you ask them to help with the project they won't.  Of ten that I asked, seven refused point blank, one was completely unreliable, one is busy and has abandoned us and Luksy remains the only one working on this project.
“With the kind of power he possesses,
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I agree...  'didn't' probably works better (I have changed it), in fact I spent quite a long time with that sentence.  I suppose it also depends on taste.  SOmeone else out there will no doubt say hadn't is best and another that prayer "isn't cloud" or something haha
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Agreed. That's one of the reasons why I like what you've done with the project, because most of it has sounded natural IMO. And IMO, that's huge for keeping someone's interest in the dialog. There's different tones that can be interpreted in different ways by something as simple as hadn't versus didn't.

Unfortunately most Japanese speakers like to whinge that the original sounds crap and then when you ask them to help with the project they won't.
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I find this to be a problem so often when trying to speak to someone with a different native language. There are so many words or phrases that don't have english equivalents, and even when English has words to match the phrases sometimes the tone or feeling of the phrase is lost. I'll ask someone what a phrase I heard means in English, and even when they can speak both fluently it's like they just had an epiphony and realized there are some thoughts that even they have trouble translating.

Also, this project has never been secondary... it has always been priority but I am at the mercy of my translator's time as well. Of ten that I asked, seven refused point blank, one was completely unreliable, one is busy and has abandoned us and Luksy remains the only one working on this project.
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Sorry, my bad. Guess I should ease off the work mule. lol
 
There's so many ways that 1 part can be said alone...

"I didn't stand a chance of beating/defeating him."

"I didn't stand a chance against him."

"I didn't have a prayer of defeating him."

"I hadn't a chance against him."

"I had no chance/hope."

"I was no match for him."

"I was out of his league."

"I hadn't a hope in hell."

"I was f*ckin' doomed!"

And on and on and on. Perhaps looking at it, "I didn't stand a chance" is "more cloud".  Hard to really know what cloud would say he is fictional and I am not Kitase. 

I think "Didn't stand a chance against him"  is probably the best.  I do like to mix it up a bit though, esp with the NPC.
 
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“I wonder how many years have   passed since then?   I just got into town again,   but I can't believe it…    The whole town is back to normal,   except for the strange people   with black clothes all around.”{NEW}“The town reeks of Shinra,   but I won't go after them.   You may think I'm running from them,   but it's just that   I don't want anything to do   with Shinra anymore.   Feels like time is running out.”{NEW}“I'm sure you'll find this letter.   And this gift for you. It should come in handy.   I can't even jump anymore.   But I hope you continue to sharpen   your skills and remember what I taught you.”{NEW}“To my most precious student,  From Zangan”------------------------------Received "Final Heaven"
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“How many years have passed since then,I wonder? I've returned to the village, but what I see here shocks me. The whole place is back to normal, except for some odd-looking people in black cloaks loitering around…”{NEW} The town reeks of Shin-Ra, but I don't intend to go after them. You may think I'm running away, but I'm done being caught up in their silly affairs.{NEW} Well now,{TIFA}, I have to leave this house before whoever lives here gets back… I don't have much time.{NEW} I feel sure that you'll find this letter. And with that certainty, I have hidden a gift here for you. I think it will come in handy. Although I would very much like to give it to you in person, having one of my disciples see me all old and weak is too much to bear. I can't even jump anymore. I pray that you will continue to refine the techniques I taught you.    To my most beloved disciple,     from Zangan.”------------------------------Obtained {TIFA}'sultimate secret art "Final Heaven"
 
last one now, for sure :P

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“Periodic Report to Professor Hojo”   1  Clone Activity Report   Unfortunately, no 'CLONES' have left   this town this quarter.   As previously reported, the 'CLONES 'seem   to be sensing something.   But all they say is, 'Reunion' or 'Sephiroth'   and show no other signs of activity.{NEW}   2  Confidentiality Report   A total of eight people have visited   this town this quarter.     Fortunately, none knew about   the incident five years ago.   Therefore, no one knows the town was restored   exactly as it was five years ago.   Our staff, disguised as townspeople,   have improved their acting skills,    and we do not report any problems   at this time.{CHOICE}  That is all.
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“Periodic Report to Professor Hojo” 1. Copy Activity Record Unfortunately,no 'Copies' have left the village during this period. As previously reported, it would certainly appear that the 'Copies' are sensing something. However,they only ever mutter the words 'Reunion' and 'Sephiroth', and show no desire to leave here.{NEW} 2. Confidentiality Report A total of eight people have visited the village this period.   Fortunately,none of them were aware of the incident five years ago. No one has noticed that the village has been restored to exactly how it appeared before the fire. The staff playing the villagers have also improved on their acting skills. There are no further issues to report at this time.{NEW}   End of report.
 
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Important part of the story...  Did they do it justice?

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Nibl Mako Reactor------------------------------{TIFA}“Hey! That isn't you!”------------------------------{CLOUD}“Za… Z…ax. Zax…”------------------------------{TIFA}“You remembered!!”------------------------------{TIFA}“That's right! It was Zax who came to Niblheim with Sephiroth!”------------------------------{TIFA}“Then,where were you,{CLOUD}?”------------------------------{TIFA}“{CLOUD}. Did you… see this?”------------------------------{CLOUD}“I saw… it…”------------------------------{TIFA}“…You did come. …You did keep your promise.”------------------------------{TIFA}“So you really did come when I was in a bind!”------------------------------{CLOUD}“Sorry… I didn't get there… sooner…”------------------------------{TIFA}“It's all right… {CLOUD}.”------------------------------Sephiroth“Do you really believe the likes of you can……?”------------------------------Zax“{CLOUD}… Sephiroth… finish him.”------------------------------{TIFA}“…When I'm… in a bind… ……you said you'd come. You promised me…”------------------------------
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No, I mean Zax.  See first post :)

Zack Fair > ザックス・フェア > Zakkusu Fea > Zax Fair [possibly from Sax, old English for Knife.  There are references to it on Last Order.  Zack would be ザック not ザックス]
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The installer as usual allows you to keep Zack, but Zax is very likely the correct name (regardless of whether that is now accepted canon).  Zakkusu is not Zack :)
 
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By the way, is the dialogue 39% complete or 39% left (61% complete)?
 
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See the main posts.  Second post this time.  "x of y"  means how much completed.
 
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me and Luksy are making a push to get to 50%.  So far we are at 47%...

Getting there.
 
Hello DLPB and Lusky,

Thank you for your contribution to the project. I just wanted to say, "Keep up the good work and don't let stress discourage you."

I have followed your progress so far for the Kalm scene, and I must say I am very impressed. This would make the staff from Square-Enix give you both a pat on the back.
 
Thanks. Still need improvements to the dialogue so far... esp the start of the game since I have learned a thing or two in the time I have been doing this... but it is going well.  A final play through and shape up of the dialogue will be needed right at the end before it goes to Covarr and others to look over it for mistakes in grammar and so forth.

A long way to go.
 
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