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Time for another before and after:
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I am also going back over the game from the beginning correcting some of my more clunky dialogue which was made from a lack of experience 
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Soldier and 'a Soldier' are like the Marines. So the 2 are used interchangeably.
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Ester“Ummm… First use {PURPLE}[ASSIST]{WHITE} to choose either AUTO or MANUAL.”{NEW}“This lets you control the Chocobo yourself or lets it run on its own.”{NEW}“But it's pretty hard to make the Chocobo run the way you want it to. If the Chocobo doesn't like you, it won't listen.”{NEW}“Then,you're stuck…”{NEW}“But,most of the Chocobos I have are mellow and you should be able to handle them.”{NEW}“When you're riding, use {PURPLE}[SWITCH]{WHITE} to Speed Up and {PURPLE}[CANCEL]{WHITE} to Slow Down.”{NEW}“But,if you go faster than the Chocobo can handle,it will quickly lose its stamina.”{NEW}“Use the {PURPLE}[Directional Keys]{WHITE} to move the Chocobo left and right, use {PURPLE}[OK]{WHITE} to get a boost of speed.”{NEW}“But this makes your stamina run out faster.”{NEW}“Some Chocobos are bad-tempered and can't pace themselves. They'll lose their stamina quickly.”{NEW}“Those Chocobos should be set on Manual to slow them down.”{NEW}“Finally,some advice for the restless. Once the first and second Chocobo cross the goal line,”{NEW}“Press {PURPLE}[START]{WHITE} to end the race.”------------------------------
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Esto“Righto…”{NEW}“First,use {PURPLE}[ASSIST]{WHITE} to switch between Auto and Manual. You choose between controlling it yourself or letting it run on its own.”{NEW}“It's actually quite hard to make a Chocobo do what you want. If you've not bonded with it, it won't listen to a word you say.”{NEW}“That can't be helped this time,unfortunately.”{NEW}“Well,nevermind. Most of the Chocobos I prepare are quite mellow, so you should be be fine.”{NEW}“When you're in control,use {PURPLE}[SWITCH]{WHITE} to speed up, {PURPLE}[CANCEL]{WHITE} to slow down.”{NEW}“But watch out… If you push a Chocobo faster than it can handle,it'll lose its stamina in no time.”{NEW}“You can guide the Chocobo with the {PURPLE}[Directional Keys]{WHITE}. To make it sprint,use the whip by pressing {PURPLE}[OK]{WHITE}.”{NEW}“Obviously,its stamina will run out a lot faster this way.”{NEW}“A Chocobo with poor temperament doesn't know its own pace and can wear itself out almost immediately.”{NEW}“If you're dealing with a Chocobo like that,switch to Manual and slow it down.”{NEW}“Finally, some advice for the restless. Once first and second place have been decided…”{NEW}“…you can press {PURPLE}[START]{WHITE} to end the race.”So new is:
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District 1,Station--------------------------------------------------Biggs“Wow… You're from Soldier,all right!”{NEW}“But… one of theirs in a group like Avalanche…!?”--------------------------------------------------Jessie“…Soldier? They're the enemy…”--------------------------------------------------Jessie“Why would a Soldier join Avalanche?”--------------------------------------------------#h 3Biggs“Hang on,Jessie, he quit Shin-Ra… He's with us now.”--------------------------------------------------Biggs“I didn't catch your name…”--------------------------------------------------{CLOUD}“…{CLOUD}.”--------------------------------------------------Biggs“{CLOUD},eh? I'm…”--------------------------------------------------{CLOUD}“I'm not interested in names. Once the job's done… I'm gone.”--------------------------------------------------“What the hell you all doin'!? I told ya… never move in a group!”--------------------------------------------------“Our target's Mako Reactor 1. Meet up at the bridge in front of it.”--------------------------------------------------“Ex-Soldier,huh? Don't trust ya!”--------------------------------------------------{BARRET}“You can run by holdin' {PURPLE}[Cancel]{WHITE} with the {PURPLE}[Directional Keys]{WHITE}. Keep up with me!”--------------------------------------------------
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I was wrong to be completely gung ho with the adherence to accuracy at all times. There is a small degree of lee way. For the most part (like 95%) the actual 1:1 meanings are perfectly fine... but sometimes like above they just aren't. The fundamental problem I have with most fan translations and of Baskett's original is that they take TOO MANY liberties.. and make too many mistakes. For example, I could easily call Quake "Tremor" but what you get out of it cannot justify changing the work.